Oct
02

Painting Pictures With Words – Autumn Descriptions

Filed Under (Writing) by on October 2, 2010 and tagged

We have been learning how to add details and elaboration to our writing. Writing with specific details helps the reader visualize, so they feel that they are right in the story. If you use the right details you can paint a picture with words.

Autumn Afternoon

Autumn Afternoon

When we describe a setting or an object, it is good to add details for what the character can see, hear, feel, smell, or taste. That way the reader can feel like they are right there.

Here are a few examples of our descriptive writings about an autumn day in Connecticut.

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Could you visualize our descriptions?

What details helped you visualize?

What do you picture when you think of an autumn day?



20 Responses to “Painting Pictures With Words – Autumn Descriptions”

  1.   Hamilton Salsich (your teacher's father, and also a teacher) Says:

    Dear 3rd Grade Students of Mr. Salsich,

    I was so impressed with these autumn descriptions. I could see the leaves and smell the aromas and hear the wonderful sounds of fall as I read. These writings did not seem like 3rd grade writings — more like 6th or 7th grade work! SERIOUSLY! You children are fine writers!

    I am so glad that I subscribe to your blog, because I love getting all your new posts.

    By the way, when I think of fall, I think mostly of the colors of the leaves, which is why I love the painting at the top of your blog post.

    Sincerely,
    Mr. Hamilton Salsich

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  2.   BB Says:

    Dear Mr Salsich and class,

    Awesome post.

    I could actually visualize the descriptions what your students wrote. They were very creative with their descriptions.

    What helped me visualize were the colours that were mentioned and things that happen in real life.

    When I think an Autumn Day I think of the leaves slowly falling Changing different shades of colour. From green to gold to red and to yellow. Mist in the morning shining through the sun light. At nights the sky is darker and the stars shine.

    From BB.

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    •   Mr. Salsich Says:

      Dear BB,

      Thank you for the outstanding comment. I like how you complimented on our blog and you also added a descriptive writing piece of your own. I could especially picture the stars shining in the dark night sky. Margot thinks it should go in our slide show of descriptive writings!

      Your writing seemed like it was from a higher grade than year 2!

      From your blogging buddies,
      Mr. Salsich’s students

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  3.   Sam C.'s Grandma Moi Says:

    Thank you, Sam C., for giving me your class’ blog address!

    What great strategies you are learning and USING in both your reading and writing activities. This platform gives your audience an exciting and relevant review of an exceptional class and teacher team!! You are going above and beyond typical 3rd grade achievement, and I am very proud of all that is showcased from your classroom!

    Sam C.’s Grandma Moi

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  4.   Benjamin Says:

    Dear Mr. Salsich,

    These descriptive writing pieces were outstanding! It felt like I was actually right there in those good smelling aromas and the leaves crackling with every step I took.

    Awesome writing!

    Benjamin (From last year)

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    •   Mr. Salsich Says:

      Dear Benjamin,

      Thanks for checking in on the blog! Yes, the students certainly did a good job of describing a fall day. I like how you said you could imagine, “those good smelling aromas and the leaves crackling with every step I took.” That is pretty descriptive writing too!

      By the way, my nephew Noah got the same electronics circuit kit that you shared last year. I showed him how to make the launching helicopter and he loved it!

      From, Mr. Salsich

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  5.   paul Says:

    Dear Mr. Salsich,

    Those were all wonderful descriptions of fall.I could close my eyes and smell the pumpkin pies and hear the crunching of the leaves under my feet. I am impressed with your third grade class.

    From Sam K.’s dad

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  6.   Margot Says:

    Dear Mr. Salsich,

    I really enjoyed writing about fall! I could picture a fall day really well because I live next to a lot of trees.

    I wonder if our class could do a writing like this except for spring. That would be fun! :)

    From,
    Margot* :)

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  7.   Mrs McKenzie and class B4 Says:

    Dear Mr Salsich and Grade 3,

    I loved your evocative descriptions of autumn, and I certainly could visualise the sounds, smells and sights of autumn from your writing.

    I was also able to make a connection when I read about the geese flying south, as on our news just two days ago, there was an item about the godwits arriving in Christchurch. They had flown all the way from Alaska.
    That is a journey of 30,000km.
    The cathedral bells rang for half an hour on the day the godwits were sighted, to welcome them back to Christchurch.

    I look forward to reading more of your excellent writing.
    from Mrs McKenzie

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    •   Mr. Salsich Says:

      Dear Mrs. McKenzie,

      Thank you for the comment on our writing. When you have autumn in Christchurch, do the leaves turn bright colors also?

      Wow! flying from Alaska to New Zealand is incredible. Is it a tradition to ring the cathedral bells every year when the godwits return? The birds are very interesting looking with their beaks curved slightly upwards.

      From, Mr. Salsich

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      •   Mrs McKenzie and class B4 Says:

        Dear Mr Salsich
        Where we live (in Reefton) is on the other side of the South Island from Christchurch, but yes, all through the South Island we get beautiful colours on the autumn trees, as we have definite seasons.
        Right now though, the blossoms are appearing on trees, as now it is spring for us.

        I was looking again at my information about the godwits and I think the 30,000 km may be the distance for the return journey. It certainly is an amazing feat for birds of that size.
        I think it has been a tradition for several years now that the cathedral bells have been rung following the arrival of the first birds.

        from Mrs McKenzie

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  8.   Anonymous Says:

    Dear Mr Salsich’s Class.
    I am so impressed with your descriptive writing! I could see, smell, hear, taste and touch right along with you. You brought all the joys of fall to your writing. I have subscribed to your blog and look forward to reading more.

    Keep up the good work.
    Sam L’s Grandmother

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  9.   Jen (Derek's mom) Says:

    Dear Mr Salsich’s class,

    These descriptive writing pieces are wonderful! They really made me hungry for pumpkin pie and hot cider. I think a visit to Clyde’s Cider Mill is the only remedy!

    Jen (Derek’s Mom)

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    •   Mr. Salsich Says:

      Dear Jen,

      I agree, the descriptions made me hungry for pie, cinnamon donuts and fresh apple cider. That is the sign of good descriptive writing – it makes you feel like you are right there with the character seeing, smelling, and tasting everything.

      Luckily we have a real cider mill right in our town to satisfy those cravings.

      From, Mr. Salsich

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  10.   deblijbergeal Says:

    Enjoying this beautiful work from our school in The Netherlands. We will try this with our children too!

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  11.   Alexandra Says:

    Dear Mr. Salsich,

    I could visualize the blanket of leaves in Amanda’s very descriptive writing. I could also visualize the clouds moving rapidly through the sky. To me all these descriptions are perfect!

    Your student,
    Alexandra

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  12.   Kelly Says:

    Hi my name is Kelly.
    Great blog. Keep up the good work.

    Kelly
    Melville Intermediate
    Hamilton New Zealand

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  13.   Sam Graunke Says:

    What lovely descriptions of autumn. You have used strong adjectives to great effect, I could really see the steam coming off the hot chocolate in my head!

    Isn’t it funny how particular smells can be related to memories, or to times of the year?
    I asked my students about this just today and we shared some lovely memories.

    Keep up the great writing.

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  14.   Essie32 Says:

    Dear Mr.Salsich class,
    Hello! I really liked how realistic it felt while reading the paragraphs. I felt like if I was living in that place and enjoying autumn. Thanks for putting these awesome descriptions! please come back and comment our class blog at http://missnichols.edublogs.org
    Sincerely,
    Essie32

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  15.   Mariam Pasha Says:

    These descriptions are beautiful, especially for children of your age. I’m sixteen, and I think these are simply lovely.
    My favourite part of autumn would be the gentle swaying of the branches in the wind, caressing the various coloured leaves, until they shrivel-up and crunch under my feet.

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