Describing Feelings

We have been focusing on adding details to our writing so the reader can visualize what is happening. We want them to feel like they are right there in the story. One way to do this is to describe how characters are feeling instead of just saying they are mad, or cold, or scared.

Below is a PowerPoint slide show with some of our descriptions that “show” how characters are feeling instead of just “telling.”

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Could you picture what the characters were feeling?

What words or phrases helped you visualize the feelings?

13 thoughts on “Describing Feelings

  1. Dear Mr. Salsich,

    I’m guessing that Erik’s is tired because of the part when he said:
    I yawned as big as a lion.

    Your student Sean

  2. Dear Mr.Salsich,

    I liked describing our feelings I did the one that said everybody could see that Kate was mad! I am guessing that Margot`s was mad because her writing said Emily`s veins were popping out of her head and her brows were furrowed into a V shape.

    Your student, Taylor*

  3. Dear Mr. Salsich,

    I liked doing the feeling pictures because it is fun drawing stuff about your feelings. I think Erik’s feeling is tired because he gave a very good clue when he said he yawned.

    from,
    Cassidy your student

  4. Dear Grade 3
    I waited until the weekend to read your descriptions properly as I really wanted to take my time and enjoy them.
    I certainly could visualise each character’s feelings and it made me wonder what had caused each character to experience those feelings!

    I could tell from the description of Emily that she was feeling extremely tense and angry.

    Sometimes after a busy week I feel as tired as Betsy, Jake, Erik and Lisa did. But I hope I don’t drool like Tyler’s character did!

    Thank you for sharing your entertaining writing.

    from Mrs M♔Kenzie

  5. Dear Mr. Salsich and class,

    There are so many descriptive words and visual images in this post! Here are some of my favorites!


    Erik…yawned as big as a lion.
    Margot…brow was furrowed.
    Hope…mouth dropped open like the shrimp in Little Mermaid.
    Jacob…like a kid who watched a Halloween movie.
    Tyler…Smack! Poof! (Nice onomatopoeia!)
    Alison…felt sweat beads soaking my forehead.
    Alexandra…A tear that was caused by the cold froze on his cheek
    Derek…teeth were chattering like a rock in a dump truck on the highway.
    Gus…cheeks were stinging him from the wind and he had red cheeks like roses.
    Amanda…huge frown stretched across her face.
    Maggie…eyes were droopy…She slumped down as she yawned.
    Sam L. …moving about through the hallways like a snail.
    Tommy…Her mouth was slightly open as if she were about to drool.
    Sam C. …her head as red as an erupting volcano.
    Steven…stomping my feet like a T-Rex going to battle another T-Rex.
    Taylor…her brows were in a “V” shape.
    Sean…His teeth clenched tightly and he punched his hand.
    Sam K. …Large drops of sweat fell onto the floor.
    Cassidy…My hands felt like ice cubes in a freezer.
    Emmett…Mike’s teeth were chattering.
    Autumn…my teeth were clenched so tight I thought they might fall out!
    Madison…His cheeks were red and his lips were icy blue.


    I thoroughly enjoyed reading your descriptions. However, I now feel mad, cold, and scared! 🙂

    Great Show, Not Tell writing!

    Sincerely,
    Mrs. Y♥llis

  6. Dear Mr Salsich and class,

    Wow, I am impressed! I enjoyed reading your descriptive feelings. Everyone did a fantastic job of describing the feelings!

    I might have to borrow your idea and do this with my class soon. Thanks for the idea!

    Your friend,
    Miss Jordan

  7. Dear Mr. Salsich,
    Thank you for the nice comments about our Show Me writing. We really appreciated them. Our class thinks your Show Me writing is really good as well. We took a look at it today when we were checking our blog. One of our favorites was Margot’s…you could really tell that she was angry. Great job and keep up the wonderful writing.
    Your blogging Buddies,
    Mrs. Webb-Scheers and the students of 4WS

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  11. Hello,

    I love this idea! You guys did a great job with describing feelings. I had a question about the slide show. I like how it has the circle for the picture! How did you make it??

    Thanks!!!
    Michelle

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